David Young's text

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>.i ko'a goi le nanmu
>.i ko'e goi le nanmu .ije ko'a do nai ko'e

I think you mean {du nai}, which isn't grammatical either: {na du} (the
reason {du nai} isn't grammatical is that it would introduce an ambiguity:
mi du .uu nai do = mi du (.uu nai) do; mi (du (.uu) nai) do.

>.i ko'a cu minde le jenmi
>.i ko'e cu minde le su'ore sonci .ije ko'a cu minde ko'e

There's X; There's Y. X commands the army (to do something). Y commands some
of the soldiers ("[some] soldiers" would be su'ore [le] sonci) (to do
something), and X commands Y (to do something).

minde is adequate, but I'd prefer jatna, in its new definition as leader.

>.i ko'a .e ko'e cu nenri le kerfa nunkatna zarci
>.i ko'a .e ko'e puze lifri le flira kerfa vimcu
                 ^^^^ puzi  ^^ lenu

X and Y are in the haircutting shop. X and Y have just experienced a shave
(without the {nu}, they experience a shaver).

>.i le velzarci cu friti zoi zoi after shave lotion zoi fi ko'a
shave lotion?  firkrevi'u litki isn't quite it...

>.i ko'a bacru lu .aunai ko punji le panci fi mi .ije le selspeni po mi
>                 ku'o ba jinvi le nu mi pu nenri le gletu zarci li'u

There's been a colossal unresolved debate on what UI+NAI means inside
a sentence. *I*'d interpret this as "I don't want you to, but...", and
would instead say {.aunai ko na punji} (= I don't want this; don't do it)

I'd say se panci rather than panci: the odor source, rather than the odor,
is being applied. The terminal of {po} is {ge'u}, not {ku'o}.

*chuckle* Nice story.

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